Your work is showing improvement sir, keep up the hard work and you'll be turning around magic before too long!
I think there's something here. Based on this short, I think you have a good understanding of comedic timing, but you need to study up on presentation and production value. Also, the lack of proper resolution to the story itself is a hindrance.
If you stick with it and keep moving forward with a goal to improve, I think you can really make a name for yourself!
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